川柳 • childless
erotic senryu by Redbud
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childless,
her wet-spots sun with the laundry —
··········prayer flags
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- “It is rare that a single person can dominate a form of art over its entire span. In the Western world, we have perhaps Shakespeare in theater and Michelangelo in sculpture, but in music there is Bach, Mozart, and Beethoven, and a plethora of masters in novels, Western poetry, and even in more recent arts such as photography, fashion, and film. But in haiku, Matsuo Basho (1644-94) stands alone.” ~ Stephen Addiss The Art of the Haiku
i have an image in my head…and I’ll admit to having to read this several times to get it…to get why the “childless” was a part of the poem…then again, having to think over things is not a bad thing, my friend!
(and I’ll smile all day when I look out the window at my prayer flags flapping in the wind…)
nilla
Thanks Nilla. :-) There’s a lot going on in this Senryu, almost a haiku. I’m very pleased with it.
you should be. It took a few read throughs…thinking of each word and each image suggested by your febrile mind… :) Tis often hard to keep up with you…. (look no commas in this comment!)
n
ps…I’d never hang mine beside the laundry…then again I have verrah nosy neighbors… :)
The ACME ‘comma’ factory of Peoria, Illinois mourns the loss of their most loyal customer. :)
Your “ps” would makes a wonderful senryu:
she hides
her bedsheet’s wetspots behind her panties —
…..the clothesline
*BLUSH*
(giggle)
poor Peoria…I’ve crashed their economy (I am diligently searching for overused comma’s in all I write these days :) )
Will,
Nilla has a better understanding of this then I, but I’ll get there.
Paul.
I love deceptively simple words. This is a masterful example.
This is deeply thought-provoking. Beautifully constructed. I’ll be considering it for a while I think.