川柳 • childless

川柳 • childless
erotic senryu by Redbud

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childless,
her wet-spots sun with the laundry —
··········prayer flags

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“It is rare that a single person can dominate a form of art over its entire span. In the Western world, we have perhaps Shakespeare in theater and Michelangelo in sculpture, but in music there is Bach, Mozart, and Beethoven, and a plethora of masters in novels, Western poetry, and even in more recent arts such as photography, fashion, and film. But in haiku, Matsuo Basho (1644-94) stands alone.” ~ Stephen Addiss The Art of the Haiku

8 comments on “川柳 • childless”

vanillamom
February 20, 2013

i have an image in my head…and I’ll admit to having to read this several times to get it…to get why the “childless” was a part of the poem…then again, having to think over things is not a bad thing, my friend!

(and I’ll smile all day when I look out the window at my prayer flags flapping in the wind…)

nilla

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- willcrimson
  February 20, 2013
  
  Thanks Nilla. :-) There’s a lot going on in this Senryu, almost a haiku. I’m very pleased with it.
- vanillamom
  February 20, 2013
  
  you should be. It took a few read throughs…thinking of each word and each image suggested by your febrile mind… :) Tis often hard to keep up with you…. (look no commas in this comment!)
  
  n
  ps…I’d never hang mine beside the laundry…then again I have verrah nosy neighbors… :)
- willcrimson
  February 20, 2013
  
  The ACME ‘comma’ factory of Peoria, Illinois mourns the loss of their most loyal customer. :)
  
  Your “ps” would makes a wonderful senryu:
  
  she hides
  her bedsheet’s wetspots behind her panties —
  …..the clothesline
- vanillamom
  February 20, 2013
  
  *BLUSH*
  
  (giggle)
  
  poor Peoria…I’ve crashed their economy (I am diligently searching for overused comma’s in all I write these days :) )
paul1510
February 20, 2013

Will,
Nilla has a better understanding of this then I, but I’ll get there.
Paul.

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thelustfulliterate
February 21, 2013

I love deceptively simple words. This is a masterful example.

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Harper Eliot
February 22, 2013

This is deeply thought-provoking. Beautifully constructed. I’ll be considering it for a while I think.

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This entry was posted on February 20, 2013 by willcrimson in Erotica, Haiku, RedBud, Senryu and tagged Erotic Haiku, Erotic Poetry, Erotic Senryu, Erotica by Redbud, Erotica by William Crimson, Haiku Erotica, Senryu, The Erotica Writer.

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