Wind It Back
This was my entry in this week’s 5 Minute Fiction contest. It was a true experiment, and perhaps not done justice by the time limit. The theme word was reverse. Try reading it backwards and forwards. -M
Wind it back in reverse.
What the hell was that?
We look at each other in a near state of shock.
I slowly, reluctantly pull back.
It takes minutes, eternal minutes to disentangle.
My hands won’t let you go.
Your legs stay locked around me.
The shuddering, the spasming, the screaming completion just won’t stop; please, never let it stop!
It’s perfection – I no longer see your eyes, we see through, into each other.
Bodies merge, pleasure cascading into something transcendent.
Staring into your eyes as the rhythm takes care of itself.
No hesitation, no trepidation now; just reception, just heat.
That first delicious trespass, welcome, ensnarement – it’s all the same.
Contact of bodies, matching of gazes.
We look at each other, and reach.
Wind it back in reverse.
jeebeezuz!!!!
how clever….it’s intense either way, but i actually *loved* it …in reverse…
absolutely *brilliant*
just…*shakes head*….this was so creative and clever and well done.
nilla
(oops…please pardon the excessive gushing but geeze…that was great!!)
We never mind excessive gushing around here, ‘Nilla. You know that. Thanks very much. I have come to really like the challenges posed by these short pieces. Sometimes they don’t work at all, but sometimes something surprising comes out.
Love it as usual!
Very intense. Good for hump day ;)
How do you think of these things? This was really ingenious. Well done!
Thanks. I actually have no idea. When you only have 5 minutes, you have to just go. It came directly from the seed word. Very kneejerk writing, in a way.
*raising my hand to vote*
i’m for kneejerk writing…..if it comes out like that…
nilla